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Those Who Say Much by *saartha:iconsaartha:



I've unexpectedly become allergic
to ink written for the sake
of watching obsidian shimmer on ivory
with no mind for comprehension of duality,
to beards and foppish French hats,
the smells of stale coffee and pretension
wafting from the podium where words
dribble out and splash forgotten
against the floor like keg dregs
no more meaning than a cheap night
with a cheap whore in a cheap hotel
just use them up and toss them in the trash
to moulder and decay in rotten abandonment.

It makes me break out into a rash
untempered writhe, flailing thrashing raging
and oh God I wish we were all empathetic
these words aren't enough, can never be enough
to tell you how I feel, and you'll never
understand exactly why I hate you so much.
©2007-2010 *saartha
:iconsaartha:

Author's Comments

Inspired by Bukowski's 'As the poems go.' I'm not that fond of him on the whole, but he does have a few good poems. Anyway, I'm torn between adding proper punctuation or not. I kinda like the frenzied feel it has as is, but...eh. Dunno.

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:iconfishtinkles:
I'm all for the frenzied feel.

Dang. This poem is... =] Awesome.
:iconsaartha:
Well, thank you very much =) I hope you stick around and take a look at some of my other pieces.
:iconmahditherovingblade:
Awesome! My sentiments are very near to those expressed here, Hence, why I don't post my own poetry;) I particluraly like you word choice...and the simile of ink and paper to obsidian and ivory.

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It wasn't me! I...I was dead at the time!
:iconsaartha:
Heh, thanks Hilary. And here I was thinking that the simile might have been a bit strained.
:iconmahditherovingblade:
Not at all:ahoy:

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It wasn't me! I...I was dead at the time!
:iconinsanekakashi:
I love the broken grammer and such in this poem. The form fits the contents. It is a head long rush to the end that leaves the reader almost breathless. I love it. I am faving. :)

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"I'm not being an asshole.

I'm being spontaneously inconsiderate"
:iconthehungerartist:
I misread the line:
"And oh God I wish we were all empathetic"
as
"And oh God I wish we were all emphatic"

My version is more funny. Not that funny is what you should be going for, mind you. But, I thought it might be of interest.
:iconmusashi2476:
Found my way to this gem through "Phoenix"

Absolutely incredible writing!

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The evolved ape has spoken.

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